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                  It is that time of year – personal essay time. All of my 
                  students are in search of writing the perfect personal essay. 
                  What is it?
  The perfect essay is not something that 
                  fits in one neatly labeled box. It is a varied as a snowflake. 
                  No two are alike.
  It is not taught in English class. It 
                  is not formulaic. It does not evolve from a set of 
                  instructions. It is not mimicry of other essays.
  It is 
                  a communication of self! It is a conversation with the reader. 
                  A good conversation goes beyond superficial chatter. The 
                  speaker and the listener become engaged with one another. A 
                  good conversation is a time of discovery for both. Many 
                  admissions officers use the essay as a way to unzip the top of 
                  a student’s head, look inside, and find something they can not 
                  find anywhere else in the application.
  The perfect 
                  application essay allows just that! It goes beyond grades, 
                  test scores, résumés and recommendations. It is a snapshot in 
                  words of some aspect of a student and his or her experience. 
                  It can grow out of any moment in a life.
  The perfect 
                  essay comes in all shapes and sizes. It is produced by the 
                  best and by the least successful students. It reveals thoughts 
                  and feelings and the skill to draw them out.
  If it is a 
                  conversation in words, then it must begin with a conversation. 
                  The aspect of my work I love best is brainstorming with 
                  students. Sometimes the ideas emerge easily. Sometimes it 
                  takes repeated conversations. Often the ideas are focused on 
                  daily lives. At times they reflect observations and concerns 
                  about the surrounding world. Every now and then an impromptu 
                  thought will slip out that I can probe and help nurture as the 
                  seed of communication.
  Often students are writing about 
                  themselves for the first time. They are facing a new challenge 
                  at a critical juncture in their lives. The perfect essay 
                  becomes an enduring reality when both the writer and the 
                  reader have gained an insight that is valued.
 
  
                  Yes, “that time of year” presents a significant 
                  opportunity!
  
                    
  Occasionally, 
                  I share snippets of essays that I have collected with current 
                  students to help them see the variety of “snowflakes” I have 
                  observed. Let me offer a few now.
  
                  
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                   Waiting
     Traveling 
                  through Australia was a series of natural wonders with none of 
                  the distractions of everyday life. This atmosphere brought out 
                  the best in all of us. I loved the time we spent in the 
                  Botanical Gardens. Walking around with no shoes, lying on the 
                  grass, looking up at wise old trees is my kind of thing. But 
                  what I really loved best was waiting with my friends for the 
                  flying foxes to wake up and fly. They never did, but the 
                  waiting was special in itself. During the hour that went by, 
                  the sun was setting; we had no place we had to be; we could 
                  just enjoy the moment. It felt like time stood still for us 
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                    Indefinable Sweetness
  Blake and I 
                  were neighbors. Our houses were identical, and we were both 
                  six years old; still, Blake and I seemed different. Initially, 
                  I saw a child with slanted eyes, a flat nose, and a small 
                  head; but as I carefully approached Blake, my intuition kicked 
                  in. I knew there was something about him that distinguished 
                  him from other small children I had met. It wasn’t his 
                  features that announced his Down Syndrome that drew me to him; 
                  it was a certain indefinable sweetness. From the first time we 
                  linked hands, Blake’s features faded from my mind. I became a 
                  big brother to him. As we spent more and more time together, I 
                  recognized the rare quality that he possessed: unconditional 
                  kindness. 
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                    Tree Hugger
     I am 
                  a tree hugger, a tie-myself- to-a-tree-before-cutting-it-down, 
                  hard-core tree hugger. In order to save animals, I have tried 
                  to sell my family on the idea that veggie meat is the way to 
                  go. So far, I have at least been able to convince them to 
                  consume organic products. I urge my parents to reuse because 
                  it’s more beneficial to the environment to reuse than to 
                  recycle. Whether it’s cleaning the beach, picking up turtles 
                  in the middle of the road, or relocating exotics, I’m always 
                  trying to protect the environment...
  I just want to 
                  help in some way, and preserving resources and the environment 
                  is a good place to start. I hope I won’t have to tie myself to 
                  a tree in order to teach others. Nevertheless, I am willing to 
                  do whatever it takes. 
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                   Harmony
       My 
                  fingers flew across the frets. I feverishly grabbed each 
                  string with the tips of my fingers. It was two in the morning, 
                  and the rest of the world was asleep. Outside of my door, 
                  nothing was happening. The only noise I could hear was my 
                  guitar. And that night, it began to speak to 
                  me.
   Somewhere between D and G falls C, the first 
                  note of Kansas’s “Dust in the Wind.” Over and over, I 
                  dedicated my entire being to playing that C. In my mind I 
                  counted off, “1, 2… 1, 2, 3, 4.” With less than intricate 
                  finger-picking abilities, I somehow hit the six strings like a 
                  hurricane. A sudden beauty emerged from the awful scratches 
                  and squeals that composed my first attempts at “Dust in the 
                  Wind.” Harmony himself arose from my strings. I was finally 
                  strumming with my soul…
  Time caught up with itself that 
                  night. My guitar had smoothed the turbulence and removed the 
                  clutter that had precipitated my restiveness. Stillness and 
                  clarity engulfed me as I unloaded my subconscious onto my 
                  guitar. I was at peace. 
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                   A Long Way
     My 
                  mother has come a long way from milking goats as a child, to 
                  living in Pennsylvania. At times she still thinks it is unreal 
                  that she came across the border illegally with her four year 
                  old daughter – me – and later, again, with her son. I agree 
                  with her, it is astounding…
  Still the ties to Mexico, 
                  our family there, and our native culture are strong. Visits to 
                  Mexico each summer have kept that special world alive. Some 
                  moments during these visits are deeply imbedded in my 
                  soul…
  I love to be in the kitchen when the family is 
                  there. I don’t say much at all. I just listen. I love to hear 
                  my family laugh at the stories I now know by heart. My 
                  abuelito enters the storytelling with a joke everybody has 
                  already heard. My abuelita’s face and body seem to strengthen 
                  by watching her sons and daughters, her grandchildren and 
                  great-grand children. As time wears on and the kitchen fire 
                  gets less luminous, I feel myself getting tired. I kiss my 
                  family goodnight and make my way across to the room that I 
                  share with my aunt and abuelita.
  Sometimes this tiny 
                  three-room house is filled with as many as sixteen family 
                  members during our summer visits. I look up at the stars. The 
                  air is cooler now, the breeze slightly blowing. And as I climb 
                  into bed, I am thankful I have my life in Mexico, as well as 
                  my life in America. 
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